Dad I didn’t jell up well, loved you mom
For money I moved out, changed Zone,
Had fun with girls and drinks, still alone
It’s a cruel world and I am coming home.
I visited once, to the nearby market,
It was full of people, and no one I know.
I am not a kid now, but a man, mid twenty,
Still I miss the days when you warned me,
Not to talk to strangers, because they are bad.
Strangers are all I know, “friends” once I had
Now I know people, I do business with,
But they just want me to sell,
Feel so lost and sometimes I yell,
I tried different girls, jobs were always hectic,
Targets were almost set, to kill me at it
Will cut budget to save money on that “Big Car”
I don’t like the food here; I iron my own scar.
I am surrounded by jungle, all dust
Malls, theaters, office, box of concrete.
Yes, I have made mistakes, but then,
My life didn’t carry the instruction sheet.
All those metro fantasies are now gone.
For money I moved out, changed Zone,
Had fun with girls and drinks, still alone
I miss you dad, I miss you mom
It’s a cruel world and I am coming home.
beautiful poetry.
‘My life didn’t carry the instruction sheet.’…. i like this
Nice poem
Shirley Anne
mind blowing…………. u expressed my feelings …. 🙂
Aww…feeling homesick?
You have brought out the thoughts really well
Home sick! naahh,, 🙂
all a work of fiction and imaginary. life has been kind to me, staying at home only..
Well said!
Hey well written…..if you don’t mind may i ask you what do mean by the line I iron my own scar?
Dear Bhaks 🙂
It’s poem dude… ‘iron own scar’… as U iron to vanish the wrinkles and scars in clothes..
I hope.. I cud explain it to U. 🙂
cheers !!!
well said @asylumheaven… 🙂
@bhaks hmmm,, guess you got the meaning now, if not then design your own meaning, you are absolutely at will to do the same.. 🙂
“It’s poem dude…” couldn’t suppress a chuckle at this…. ( .. and by the way, these words of yours, I ditto!)
@asylumheaven :- yeah u did….bdw your bloggers name is weird.. Just feels weird to address someone that way
no worries babe… am loving my name 🙂
nice to meet you 😛
Same here mate. Keep Blogging.
Great poem!
Charlie Brown once said, “In the book of life, the answers aren’t in the back.” Great poem!
I will echo how the line about ironing your own scar stood out – great line that will stay with me for awhile.
Rishabh Upadhyay, thanks for checking out my blog today. Great poem; thought provoking. We’ve all been there; perhaps all still there to some degree.
Hi Dear, Thanks for liking my poem “Achha Laga”. Your Coming back home was really good and touchy,keep it up.
Rishabh,
so much to love about this poem,… mmm… where to begin?
Just for a moment I stopped
for a short spell,
at “metro fantasies”
wondering what stories
they might have to tell,
But then I went back to that old, “scar”
which I couldn’t leave alone,
like that wobbly kid’s tooth
of that man now grown,
showing me who you are.
I am trying to unveil, Still unsure
Who i am? What my purpose are?
Failed attempts, at trying to cure,
My faded, yet beautiful little scar.
Stories at metro were always spark,
Only issue is, i am afraid of dark.
I am moving places, yet un-moved
So many thoughts, no place to park.
Seeds have now grown, to cereals,
You see me through, and it feels nice
kids have grown much before age
Farmers will now harvest the rice
Broken tooth were all better,
All we face now are broken heart,
Its a piece from Metro Fantasies
rest will come, in some other part.
till then
cheeriossss….
🙂
pieces of a broken heart
may be harvested still
who knows.
For now, ‘Till then’s’ are
all we have, and
final cheeriossss….. : -)
Really sad, searingly sad poem. That “iron my own scar” line is magic. You ever listen to The Band? There’s a lyric “stampeding cattle… they rattle the walls.” Gives me the same feeling. Odd and strange and… strangely effective.
You express your thoughts very well..
beautiful and heartfelt! its a sincere feeling emerging from the heart taking form of words. loved it.
Your poems are simply stunning from the heart!
Hi! Thanks for stopping by my blog. It gave me an opportunity to explore yours……and, boy, are you an awesome writer or what! Really great thoughts. This piece of yours echoes the sentiments of all young people today. Looking forward to reading more great stuff from you. Cheers!
🙂 thanks for stopping by… your words are my treat..
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Hey, thanks for passing by on my blog. I just thought of scrolling through some of your poems, but I was actually really touched by this one. Hope you still can go home and you took/take the chance to do it! I wished I could.
“I miss you dad, I miss you mom
It’s a cruel world and I am coming home.”
Having repeated these lines leaves a greater impact on the reader’s mind. well written!
I particularly like the lines ‘I iron my scar’ and ‘My life didn’t carry an instruction sheet’. The whole poem is great though, very feeling and has that ‘real-lifeness’ to it. Beautiful.
Thanks for checking out my blog too! 🙂
love the way you write…:)